Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some famous sportspeople are millionaires rather than other
people
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popular
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field
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. One group of
people
believe that it should be right while
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are not agree with them. I shall discuss both
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in
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paragraph and disclose
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about
this
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First
of all,
sports
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profession cannot control
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single
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person
in all
life
.
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,
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have
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require
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several qualities like
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working
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,
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their whole
life
in
sports
to become a successful
sports
person
.
This
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only available for one to
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decade
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. After, they are not capable to earn more money.
For instance
, A famous cricket player “SACHIN TENDULKAR”
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their entire
life
for cricket. Now, he is retired from cricket and
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simple
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life
; so,
sports
people
are right to justify
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earning
higher
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income.
On the contrary
, some other professions like
doctor
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,
fire fighter
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,
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and engineer
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engineer
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are spend
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their
life
to provide
comfortness
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comforts
and safety to the
socity
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society
city
. But, they are not eligible to achieve popularity or earn higher wages compared to
sports
person
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people
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.
Moreover
, some sportsperson
earn
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huge amount of money in earlier age but other
people
who spend 30 years to study
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profession and put all time to become a
suceesful
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successful
person
in their
life
to become a specialist in
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field. After completing their degree. They are not eligible to earn higher wages. To state it briefly,
sports
-
person
have
limited
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time period to achieve fame and earn higher wages. And, I justify with
this
matter, whereas, other professions are equally important but
sports
person
have risk on their
life
and all
people
have not eligible to be secure their career in
sports
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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