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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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In
this
 modern era, Education plays an important role in our life. It
also
 helps us to survive in the world. Some people think that the students should study the
science
 of
food
 and how to prepare it. But others say that school time should be used in learning importing
subjects
. I will discuss both views in the upcoming essay. To commence with, If the learners should learn the
food
 of
science
 and
also
 learn how to prepare it
then
 due to
this
, they increase their
knowledge
 about
food
.
Hence
, They have known about the nutrients and proteins which help us to keep healthy ourselves and society
also
. Because they have enough perfect
knowledge
 about every
food
 and fruits and the merits and demerits of the
food
.
Moreover
, In
future
Add a comma
,future
show examples
 they will get
Add an article
a job
show examples
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
show examples
 in
this
 field.
For example
, In
the
Correct article usage
apply
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japan the
food
science
 subject is mandatory
that is
 why the
japanist
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japanise
japan
japans
 are so healthy.
On the other hand
, The other
subjects
 give them
knowledge
 about other important things which helps us to survive in the society or world. Because without
science
 we can not know about things or why they happened. Due to the
science
 the scientist solve the lots of problems and mith about nature. So if they have
knowledge
 about all the
subjects
then
 in future they have lots of ways to settle down in which stream they are interested.
For instance
,
some
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if some
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 students are weak in
science
then
 they can choose
engineering
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to engineer
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 and take
future
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a future
show examples
 in that field. To conclude, No doubt the all
subjects
 are
neccessary
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necessary
 but the
science
 of
food
 is
also
 important to enhance their
knowledge
 and if they have
knowledge
 about foods
then
 they can take good diet and they are independent.
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