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Being a celebrity - such as a famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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A number of people believe that being popular causes more problems rather than benefits. In my opinion, the most crucial drawbacks are a lack of privacy and a hypocritical attitude of people around, which is poisoning a life too much and for that reasons I consider, that disadvantages overweight advantages.
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, the stars jeopardise privacy, as they are always in the public eyes, followed by the annoying paparazzi, who are willing to reveal dirty facts for catchy headlines.
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, being under pressure from chasing might ruin the feeling of security and have a negative impact on a mental condition, which is dangerous.
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, I remember the case with Britney Spears, which occurred in her early period of popularity and ended up with a nervous collapse, when she had shaved baldly and went to rehab afterwards.
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, celebrities in the limelight are usually a point of interest for other people, aiming to get benefits, influence and useful connections through a friendship with a well-known person.
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 their attitude tends to be more hypocritical to please stars and receive something in return. Though it seems not awful at
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 glance it is potentially detrimental when facing a serious problem you can not lean on somebody around, as you are not truly valuable to them. To sum up, fame is a great challenge and in my opinion brings more problems, affecting the most essential part of well-being,
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 as the ability to keep privacy and to have loving and reliable persons around.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public scrutiny
  • Intrusive
  • Endorsements
  • Sponsorships
  • Financial security
  • High-profile collaborations
  • Social influence
  • Philanthropic efforts
  • Trust issues
  • Mental health challenges
  • Substance abuse
  • Pressures of celebrity
  • Expectations
  • Disconnect from reality
  • Normalcy
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