Human activity has had a negative impact on plants and animals around the world some people think that this can not be taken change while others believe action can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is often believed by some that adverse effect on plants and animals due to human
activity
cannot be taken change because many
discovery
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are
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taking place
day
by
day
which has
direct
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a direct
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impact on plants and animals
however
others are against
of
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that
this
can be taken change by using the discovered
gadzets
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gadgets
when it needed only.
On the other hand
, human
activity
is necessary
evils
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. It has both negative as well as
positive
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a positive
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impact
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impacts
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on our environment considering positive points due to different human
activity
we are leading our life happily if human
activity
were stopped in past we were still living in
jungle
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the jungle
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without clothes and hunting animals for food and staying on
tree
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the tree
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to get protected from sunny days and rain. Every human
activity
is needed for the development of human activities and leading our life comfortably.
Moreover
, if
this
kind
of
activity
goes
in
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increasing
day
by
day
we will feel difficulties leading our life happily
these
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this kind
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kind
of human
activity
is polluting
are
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our
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nature
day
by
day
. If
this
kind
of
activities
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activity
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goes on rising we will even feel
problem
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problems
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while taking oxygen, drinking water and many more. If
this
kind
of
kind of
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activities
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activity
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goes on rising our modern society will again change
in
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stone
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age society. In conclusion, what
i
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feel
proper
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and limited amount of human
activity
is necessary to keep our environment
balnced
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balanced
and the adverse effect of human
activity
will decrease
day
by
day
at
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, at last,
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last
our environment will be balanced.
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