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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try an improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that
people
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 should learn to adapt to the unfortunate conditions in their
life
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 or try to make them better.
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 essay agrees with the
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 opinion. I believe that everyone has to face difficulties sometimes,
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,
people
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 need the effort to overcome
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 situations. It is undoubtedly those bad things always happen in our
life
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. Some
people
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 were born with a disability, some grow up in poverty.
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, accepting the truth and trying to live with it is their only choice. Others tolerate their job because they have to pay for bills and take care of their family.
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, in order to maintain their
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, they have no options but endure their job.
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,
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 of tolerating, I side with
people
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 who have the courage to change their
life
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.
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 of all, being satisfied with the current situation is not a solution to the real problem, only solving the existing problems can make
people
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 discover their abilities, improve their skills and live their
life
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 to the fullest.
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, despite difficulties,
people
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 usually come up with great inventions
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 as electricity, mobile devices and the internet. Without the desire to get out of difficult situations, human civilization would not have developed as it is now. In conclusion,
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 we cannot choose how we were born, we always have a choice in the way we live.
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 of being satisfied with the current situation, I believe trying our best to make our
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 better would be a more meaningful way to live.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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