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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early stage. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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One of the most important stages in the nurture of
children
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 is to distinguish between right and wrong at
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 stages of their lives. Someone believes that
punishment
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children
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. If the type of
punishment
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children
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 do something wrong intentionally, they should see
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the consequences
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 of their
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. Sometimes
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 do something wrong
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 because
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 can not put the difference between right and wrong.
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 or
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 should have a serious discussion with
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them
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 and teach
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 the true rules. But if
children
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 continue their inappropriate
act
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,
punishment
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children
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 find the consequences of their wrong act by their
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 should not do again
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Children
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 should know that they can not expect to get approval from others forever. They think that they can do everything and their
parents
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teachers
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 should approve their
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. But sometimes they do something wrong that
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 the calmness of others. In these situations,
parents
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teachers
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 should punish them to understand
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that they don’t approve all the time.
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 someone believes that
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 can hurt
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, I think it considerably depends on the type of
punishment
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 corporal
punishment
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 of
children
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 should be banned by
government
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the government
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. But some punishments like forbidding watching the television or eating their
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 food temporarily should be allowed. To conclude, if the sort of
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 correctly, it can help
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 to nurture the
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. In fact,
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 should use because
children
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 must find that
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they
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 can not expect other approval always and figure out the consequences of their wrong acts.
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