In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

In the near
future
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we assume that more and more
people
will begin to plan their holidays in
motherland
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their motherland
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instead
of going to a foreign land.
This
assumption can be backed up by the fact of economical decline and war observed all around the world. For sure there will be tourists going abroad but the numbers will most probably decrease. Below you may find 2 paragraphs agreeing and one paragraph disagreeing with the possibility of
people
choosing their own
country
for tourism.
First
of all the biggest reason why
people
will not leave their
country
for tourism is
economical
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. For an ordinary American to visit the rest of the world is easier than
an
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ordinary
Turkish
since the annual income has a huge difference.
This
difference is due to the loss of value of
Turkish
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the Turkish
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lira against
American
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the American
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Dollar. 5 years ago an average income
Turkish
person
could dream about going to vacation to Europe with a cheap ticket paid long before the travel date and reserves accumulated with 12 monthly salaries.
However
, nowadays the same
person
has to wait 24 months until he can barely afford a vacation beyond borders.
Moreover
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there is the fact of some warring
countries
and civil conflict in others. More and more
countries
lose their stability over time due to
external
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influence of more powerful
countries
or again economical decline. These facts are causing cold feet to
people
who can even afford the travel.
People
want to have
a
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peace of mind when they go to a
five star
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Hotel
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or even to historical places of ancient culture. It doesn’t matter how beautiful the foreign
country
is. The instinct of self-preservation and the feeling of
comfort
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zone will not allow one to travel. Despite these heavy points, we shall
also
consider that there is always a cheaper
country
to go to.
This
enables a
person
to visit a
country
which has less valuable currency and cheaper hotels, food etc.
For
example
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again an ordinary
Turkish
person
can visit Egypt relatively easier than
other
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in other
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countries
. To conclude the subject one can easily say that money and war can sway even the most determined holiday junkies. If we consider a more common example holidays are generally experienced with loved ones.
This
will prevent the parents or the spouse from taking unnecessary risks where –in fact- there shall be no risks at all. The world is changing and it is not going in a better direction. Planning a holiday is cheaper and safer in our own
country
not to mention easier. It is not ideal but in the near future tourism will be regrettably less
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.
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  • domestic tourism
  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
  • convenience
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • local businesses
  • comfort zone
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