In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?
In the near
future
we assume that more and more Add a comma
,future
people
will begin to plan their holidays in motherland
Correct pronoun usage
their motherland
instead
of going to a foreign land. This
assumption can be backed up by the fact of economical decline and war observed all around the world. For sure there will be tourists going abroad but the numbers will most probably decrease. Below you may find 2 paragraphs agreeing and one paragraph disagreeing with the possibility of people
choosing their own country
for tourism.
First
of all the biggest reason why people
will not leave their country
for tourism is economical
. For an ordinary American to visit the rest of the world is easier than Replace the word
economic
an
ordinary Change preposition
for an
Turkish
since the annual income has a huge difference. This
difference is due to the loss of value of Turkish
lira against Correct article usage
the Turkish
American
Dollar. 5 years ago an average income Correct article usage
the American
Turkish
person
could dream about going to vacation to Europe with a cheap ticket paid long before the travel date and reserves accumulated with 12 monthly salaries. However
, nowadays the same person
has to wait 24 months until he can barely afford a vacation beyond borders.
Moreover
there is the fact of some warring Add a comma
,Moreover
countries
and civil conflict in others. More and more countries
lose their stability over time due to external
influence of more powerful Correct article usage
the external
countries
or again economical decline. These facts are causing cold feet to people
who can even afford the travel. People
want to have a
peace of mind when they go to a Correct article usage
apply
five star
Add a hyphen
five-star
Hotel
or even to historical places of ancient culture. It doesn’t matter how beautiful the foreign Fix capitalization
hotel
country
is. The instinct of self-preservation and the feeling of comfort
zone will not allow one to travel.
Despite these heavy points, we shall Add an article
the comfort
also
consider that there is always a cheaper country
to go to. This
enables a person
to visit a country
which has less valuable currency and cheaper hotels, food etc. For
example
again an ordinary Add a comma
,example
Turkish
person
can visit Egypt relatively easier than other
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in other
countries
.
To conclude the subject one can easily say that money and war can sway even the most determined holiday junkies. If we consider a more common example holidays are generally experienced with loved ones. This
will prevent the parents or the spouse from taking unnecessary risks where –in fact- there shall be no risks at all. The world is changing and it is not going in a better direction. Planning a holiday is cheaper and safer in our own country
not to mention easier. It is not ideal but in the near future tourism will be regrettably less colorful
.Change the spelling
colourful
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