You use the local swimming pool often and during one of your visit you have encountered a problem. Write a letter to the manager and say – What the problem was and when it happened – What the swimming pool staff have done about it – Suggest your own solution to the problem.

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Dear Sir, Hope you are doing well. I am one of your regular users of a swimming

pool

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However

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, I want to express my dissatisfaction during one of my visits. On 12th

april

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April

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, I visited the

pool

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with my family. On that day, the water of the

pool

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was not clean and I was not able to use the

pool

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. My children were very disappointed because after a long

time

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time,

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they got a chance to use the

pool

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In addition

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this

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, the changing rooms were

also

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unclean. The

staff

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that was present over there tried to clean the water and changing areas, but,

not

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were not

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able to do it properly. I want to suggest some measures to solve these problems. I think

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problem happened because of a shortage of

staff

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. First of all, you should increase your

staff

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members, so, that they can clean the water of the swimming

pool

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Moreover

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staff

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should

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take responsibility for checking the changing room after people leave. I hope you will work on these suggested measures. Hoping to hear from you soon regarding

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matter Yours faithfully Jyoti

iamjyoti277Wed Apr 23 2025

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Try to include more specific details about the actions that the staff took to address the issue, as this will provide a clearer picture of the situation.

coherence and cohesion

Consider using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more clearly and improve the flow of your letter.

coherence and cohesion

Make sure to capitalize the names of months, such as 'April'. This shows attention to detail and professionalism in your writing.

task achievement

You expressed your dissatisfaction clearly and provided specific examples of the problems you encountered.

task achievement

The suggested solutions you provided were practical and relevant to the problem at hand.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

186 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

encountered
cleanliness
facilities
issue
staff
address the problem
quick clean-up
unresolved
implement
regular cleaning schedule
peak hours
thorough inspections
dedicated cleaning staff
maintain cleanliness

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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