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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. other people believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagee with them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #friends #disagee
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society
 builds up of a
variety
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people
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a different
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different ideas
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ideas
. As part of
the
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society
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,society
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 we come across
various
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a various
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friend
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friends
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 with
variety
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a variety
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 of
ideology
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ideologies
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 who may agree or disagree with our
ideas
. Some
people
 in
the
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society
 think
its
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 better to choose
friends
 who
has
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have
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 the same opinion while some other
people
 think
its
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it's
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 good to have
friends
 who disagree with them. Some
people
of
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in
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 the
society
 believe when similar
friends
 are brought together
thet
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that
they
 have similar
ideas
 and
less
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fewer
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 conflicts.
This
 is due to the thinking of each individual where they do not like to hurt other
people
 and their feelings. These
people
 are more sensitive to the
others
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other's
others'
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 thoughts and there will be less or no
conficts
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conflicts
 among
friends
 creating a pleasant social environment. These
type
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types
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 of
people
 tend to pick
friends
 with a better coherence and understanding which makes a happy environment. By having
a
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friends
a friend
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friends
 with less
opporsition
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opposition
,
the
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society
 will
also
 be developing in a manner with lesser conflicts. It will help to bond
people
 better and keep away enemies and external threats which will lead the way to
build
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building
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 strong teams. On the
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other hand
otherhand
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 some other
people
 think that
its
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it's
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 better to have
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a friend
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friend
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friends
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 with different
ideas
. It will help to create diverse
ideas
 and pave the way to
constrctive
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constructive
constrictive
 thinking. As human
beings
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,beings
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people
 do not think on
the
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a
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 similar wavelength, and they come from a
variety
 of
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backgrounds
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back grounds
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backgrounds
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 and education levels.
This
 mixture will always have a
variety
 of thinking and find
solutuions
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solutions
 to problems in
diverse
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a diverse
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 manner. It will overcome
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loopholes
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loop holes
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loopholes
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 in
people
 thinking
on
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in
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 the same manner. In conclusion,
aome
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some
people
 think that
its
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it's
it is
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 better to choose
friends
 with
same
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the same
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 opinions others think
its
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it's
it is
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 even better to choose
friends
with
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apply
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a
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apply
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who disagree with each other.
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