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Most information today is available online whereas in the past it was stored in books or on paper. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays we live in the era of the Internet which causes almost every
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information
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 like books or even scrolls now stored in digital form somewhere
at
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 the servers.
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 trend made people’s everyday work much easier and
productive
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 than before. I think that it has more benefits than drawbacks and
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 essay outlines the most weighty pluses of
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 a decision. The
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 and the most obvious reason is the usability of online
information
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.
In
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 the present, just a simple phone with
an
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access to the Internet is possible to find any kind of
information
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 you need. With
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 small
device
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 it is achievable to read almost every book on the Earth. Today’s way of storing
information
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 is
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 more efficient - one terabyte hard drive contains the same amount of data as the deck of A4 paper sheets lasting to the moon.
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, when we store
information
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 in the digital form it’s easy to edit it, copy or share whereas on paper it is impossible to rewrite anything inscribed before which
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 slightly prevents the global problem of deforestation. One more important problem with classical books it’s their obvious heaviness, especially if we need something like huge
encyclopedies
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encyclopedias
 or anatomy manuals. To sum it up, in the present paper books are nothing more than
history
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 exhibits because all data in these
already
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are already
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 uploaded to the Internet and anybody can use it as he or she wants. Future is already here and
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 situation is one of many points which
confirms
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 it.

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