Some people say that what children watch influences their behaviours. Others believe the amount of time they spend on television influences their behaviours the most. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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The making development of
children
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concern about
. It along with a behaviour of a child are a key to predict in the near future .
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, some proponent points out that something that attracts a kid can potentially contact
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their mind and what they are thinking about . Whereas others argue that television is the most influential device for people , especially for kids . Both
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opinions will be cleared in
this
case. Almost
children
are keep
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an
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on something like mainstream on their activity that makes them be appetited . Even they can do an impression of somebody have inspired them . Many
things
can make them excited
such
as an impressive character in a film or a video game,
also
a politician ,
one
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of
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a powerful person
along
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with
talent
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for conducting countries . Adolf Hitler is
most
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famous political person
also
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the most famous predator in human history . he controlled his country and
militaries
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by
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his silly strategy or crazy
think
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that the people
such
as a kid supposed that he was a man whose civilians in Germany at that time were proud of his career and believed that he was a god on German history . He created a trend by his sign that
children
do an impression of his gesture once he greeted a people and stood on his automatic with unique behaviour that was followed by
children
. What a silly
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in that time that Hitler had influenced
to
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their mind .
Besides
, television
also
a unit
can
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involves
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directly to behaviours
on
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kids . For
exmaple
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example
,
children
usually
appeals
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on
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a powerful character on a
catoon
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cartoon
such
as a spiderman or Joker , each of
who
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makes the audience like
children
more impressed by active heroes that they will buy a
likewise
of their clothes to turn into a character on film . The main problem is
children
can be influenced easily by a film on television . In conclusion , a kid can be contacted to their think because of a small age . I'm sure that TV is not a unique thing
on
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most
things
influence them . There are many
things
outside
will
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create a lot of trends
make
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children
will do their behaviour .
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