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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement?

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In the contemporary world, it has become common to digitalize many forms of media. Particularly,
newspapers
 and
books
 are being replaced with a rise of free versions on the internet.
Thus
, I agree that those paper-based media will be disappeared eventually.
To begin
 with, we understand that the
newspapers
 contributed every people to keep up with the latest news and enlightened them with the reasonable subscription fees.
However
, as
time
 pass there are many kinds of domestic spending on the monthly basis.
Hence
, the priority of subscriptions and purchase of
books
 have been laid back. To elaborate, in the 19th century there was no hard competition for children's education
,
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 and overly expensive fuel. Yet, in the 21st century now we are hardly affording the other monthly bills so it is not weird to move on free
newspapers
 and
books
 online.
In addition
, in our modern ,world it is rather impossible to have spare
time
 solely for individuals. That just means, for most of the readers have been taken away their
time
 for reading.
For instance
, in my ,experience my father used to read
newspapers
 at 7 in the morning before his departure to the work or before dinner at around 6 p.m.
However
, his job being more competitive
then
 he could not have spare
time
 to read. While the portability of smartphones makes readers convenient to read anywhere or anytime. So now he reads
newspapers
 with his phone. For busy modern ,people smartphones are the most efficient way to access
newspapers
 or
books
. To conclude, I cannot agree more that paper-based media are necessary to update people and cultivate their knowledge.
Therefore
, it is inevitable change as they have their own flaws
such
 as poor portability and monthly charges.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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