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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as particle problems. Do you want extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language #particle
People
 who stay in a foreign nation usually need more time to
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a
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new
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.
Moreover
,
language
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this
 issue. From where I stand, I agree with
this
 statement. In
this
 essay, I will briefly
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 the reason and I give my own opinion before the conclusion is reached.
First
 of all, the
people
who
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without a fluent
language
 may cause many difficulties in their
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individual'
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individual
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 life. With the
language
 barrier, they are more difficult to communicate with others. If they can not have
a
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fluent communication with their
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, they will feel
isolate
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.
In addition
, going to a local market seems to be a big challenge for them.
For example
, when my college English teacher came to Taiwan
at
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first
, she was afraid to talk with a local
people
 and avoid
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 to a local market. In more detail,
language
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 barrier
also
exacerbate
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 misunderstanding situation
at
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workplace
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. If they cannot freely express their idea, they might not only hinder their ability but
also
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 the opportunity
of
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 promotion.
Furthermore
,
language
 is a tool to convey
people'
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people's
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 thoughts. Having
a
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trouble establishing
good
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 relationship at work
and
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also
 reduce
a
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efficiency in teamwork, regardless
how
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 hard they work.
On the other hand
,
language
problem
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problems
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 often
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effect
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people
 temporary.
Additionally
, the capability of
foreign
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language
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 can be improved markedly while they
staying
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 for a long time.
As a result
, they may conquer
this
 issue when the time
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 by. To sum up,
although
language
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 barrier is not a permanent problem, it is not easy for
people
 to overcome.
Consequently
, I agree that living in a country with poor access to
local
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language
 give many influences on their social and daily life.
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