Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some today argue that schools are no longer necessary because children can learn so much from internet and be educated at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

It is better to buy just a few expensive clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children shoul be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adultsz. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Crimes and other kinds of information on the television and newspaper have bad consequences. This kind of information to be restricted to be shown in media. To what extend do you agree or disagree.