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Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government? Give resones for your answer and unclude any relevent examples from your own knowledge or experiance.

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madical
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medical
 technology is the most imperative need. In order to get batter
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medical
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research
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 required money and some private players or
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 that all of
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research
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 should be run by
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responsible
resposible
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 person or a
government
.
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relevent
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relevant
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paragraphs
. To commence with, when some private organisations do
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 they only take care
about
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 their profits which they will get after
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the research
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done
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.
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, in
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the covid-19
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pandemic
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 so many private institutions earn cats and
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 amount money. To
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elaborate
celebrate
, when
government
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the government
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 was giving cost-less
vaxiens
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vaccines
 to the civilians while they
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 giving in higher
pricies
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prices
. For
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 private
compnies
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companies
shoud
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should
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to
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carry medical reachers.
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,
government
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the government
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 has to be careful during the
research
.For
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instance
, covid-19
virous
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virus
various
 was spread because of their
negligiance
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negligence
 while performing
research
.That means
government
institution
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institutions
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 had
security
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a security
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breach
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 in building premises and for that reason some scientists got
infacted
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infected
. Sometimes
government
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the government
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 has to
becareful
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be careful
 in
reaserch
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research
. In
conclusin
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conclusion
, the only concern is that whoever is funding the
research
,
research
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institutes
institutions
 needs to be careful during the
research
otherwise
 they
are end
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 up getting with
voulnarable
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vulnerable
 consequences.
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