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Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think that this a positive or negative developmen?

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Scientists predict that all
people
 will choose to speak one
language
 in the future. there are
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vary
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 advantage and disadvantage but in my respective, it
harm
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to
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us more than benefit . On the one hand, if everyone in the world
speak
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 the same
language
that
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people
 can communicate easier. When
people
 go to a new
country
, they will not worry about
communicate
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the problem
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problem
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. That can encourage
people
 to travel around the world,
for instance
, my father and mother only can speak their mother
language
,
therefore
 they did not travel a lot , they only choose the place can speak Chinese or join the tours. Without the communication restrictive, I believe they
willing
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 to travel
more
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country
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.
In addition
,
people
 can receive information quickly without waiting for a professional translation.
For example
, a new book published by a foreign author,
we
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can immediately appreciate the book.
On the other hand
, it seems to be boring when all the
people
 speak the same
language
.
Language
 is one of the most important features of culture. From the
language
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 we can know more about the history of the
country
.
Chinese
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language
 is very interesting, from the word we can guess the meaning, like the word "sun"
it
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is developed by the picture of
sun
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. I believe that we can
also
 find something interesting and unique
from
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other
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another language
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language
. Because of the
unique
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 which draw
people
learning
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 and understand
other
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another country history
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country
 history. In conclusion, each coin has both
side
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 but I think the negative weigh
out
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the positive. Because I believe that culture is the most valuable to every
country
.
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