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Write a letter of invitation to your parents. In the letter: – Explain that you have completed your studies – Give details of the event, including time, date and dress code – Let them know how many tickets they have and who they are for?

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Dear Parents I am writing
this
 to invite you
on
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 the function of graduation ceremony. I have completed my
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 in
the
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apply
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Computer Application with
good
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a good
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score
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scores
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 and I have achieved
highest
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the highest
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 marks in the university.
Moreover
, our university will organize the convocation. So, I am going to invite you
on
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 the event of graduation ceremony which will held
in
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 the 25th of December
as well as
 Students and parents will enter
in
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apply
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the convocation hall at 8:00 in the morning. After that,
Principal
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the Principal
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 will give
motivational
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 speech
then
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 the ceremony of graduation will start and
dress
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the dress
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 code is not
compulsary
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compulsory
. That's why, everyone will wear formal clothes. Actually, I want to invite our whole family on
this
 special occasion but our university
have
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main
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 rule that one student can buy only two tickets.
Due to
this
 reason, I am going to invite you because you are my first priority. I am looking forward to
see
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 you! Best Wishes, Bhullar
Submitted by bhullarharpreetkaur68 on

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using an opening or introductory sentence that gently leads into the purpose of your letter, setting a warm tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea for clarity.
Task Achievement
The letter clearly communicates the main purpose and includes all necessary details regarding the event.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is warm, inviting, and suitable for addressing parents.
Coherence and Cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately used and create a polite tone.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accomplishment
  • celebration
  • ceremony
  • decorum
  • exclusive
  • invitations
  • milestone
  • presence
  • significant
  • spirit of the occasion
  • venue
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