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Computers are widely used in education and teachers now play a less important role in the classroom than ever before. Do you agree or disagree?

#computers #education #teachers #role #classroom
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The advancement of
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 has affected how our education system runs. With more learners becoming more dependent
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technology
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, especially computers for their tools of learning, some people believe that the teacher’s role is becoming unnecessary. I strongly disagree with
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teachers
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 who are humans are the life source of energy in the class and the only ones who can do direct observation to the children’s
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 in class.
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 play a key role not only
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 the source of knowledge, but
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 as the
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 who can determine the classroom’s atmosphere.
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 can explain new knowledge and at the same time
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 transcend emotions, expressions and complex interactions, which can
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 internalised by
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. Meanwhile, computers are merely just tools that have been programmed to finish a certain objective with rigid choices and limited actions. In
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 can not afford to have lively communication.
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,
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 need human intelligence
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 conscious enough to assess and observe how
students
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 behave. Unlike computers, which often do not possess flexible
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 to expand consideration as equal as human beings can do,
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,
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, know consciously and can respond depending on how stimulus induces them. In
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 in response to children’s behaviour.
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, children who face learning difficulties can only receive a rigid score on their academic record, if
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examiners. Needless to say, the
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 will certainly fail to analyse wisely the reason behind
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. In conclusion,
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 the enhancement of
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 has happened at an unprecedented pace and slowly emerged in the educational system, I believe it will never replace how
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 do their job in delivering knowledge. As
teachers
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 are living entities who can
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moral consideration, intelligence, and consciousness,
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machine
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 will never be able to substitute
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