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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or their free time. And have health problems as a result. Why do many people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

#people #exercise #time #health
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These days, many employments do not have enough
exercise
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 in their leisure
time
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 before and after their
time
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work
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 because after working they are exhausted or some of them do not have the effort to pay for
membership
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 and some of them could not do
exercise
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 because they are patients. The main reason that many colleagues do not have enough
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 in their free
time
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 is, that they are exhausted when they come back
home
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 and they want to get relax and spend
time
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 with their family.
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, when I used to
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 I could not go to the
gym
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 because I had a lot of
work
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 to do when I arrived
home
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. I had to clean
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 and cooked dinner for my husband and me.
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, I had to
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 overtime, so I did not have any leisure
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. If I had plenty of
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, I would have spent it with my partner. Another reason that many co-workers could not do
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 is, that they could not spend money for
membership
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 per month, so some of them prefer to stay
home
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 and watch television or read a book or spent a day with their friends.
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, my friend and I did the
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 in a
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 every day after a while, we found out the cost of our
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 is increasing every quarterly, so we decided to go to a park together.
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, many people could not go to the
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 because of a lack their
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 and money but some government could be solving their problems.
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, some companies can have a contract with a specific
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 for their employment.
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, they can pay a part of their
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 and encourage their employees to do
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. In conclusion, many people spend their
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 without any
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 because they do not have enough
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 and money.
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, most of them are exhausted and need to get relax but if the government could be solving these problems, they encourage them to do
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 more than before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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