Childhood obesity is a growing problem nowadays. What can be done to solve the problem?

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Childhood obesity is a growing problem nowadays. What can be done to solve the problem?
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with, schools can increase the amount of exercise for everyone.
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,
children
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can do longer warm-ups and
then
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multiple different exercises like running, push-ups, pull-ups and jumping.
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, kids will burn out their energy and the unhealthy fats and ingredients they ate during the day at
school
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. Another solution is to change
children
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's diet. Of course,
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no one
none
can tell a parent how to raise their kids, but
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, the diet in
school
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can be changed.
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instead
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of some unhealthy
food
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,
school
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administrative
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can replace them with more vegetables, fruits and
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.
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,
children
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will not only eat healthier at
school
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but they will
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get used to it and maybe start doing it at home.
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of all,
children
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can make their own healthy
food
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and bring it to
school
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.
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, the parents or the kids themselves can make sandwiches or salads and maybe even some cooked
food
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. After all, there is nothing healthier than
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homemade.
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way,
children
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and more important their parents
wont
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worry about the
food
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they eat. In conclusion, there are many different ways to deal with childhood obesity. But most importantly, everything depends on the people themselves and their will to make a change.
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