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Some people think that real life skills like cooking, housekeeping and gardening should be included in the curriculum as compulsory subjects? Do you agree or disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and details.

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The chart illustrates the sales of various types of digital
games
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 (mobile
phone
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games
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, online
games
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, console
games
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, handheld
games
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) all over the world over a period of 7 years, from 2000 to 2006. Overall, handheld
games
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 were the most expensive ones and their value experienced
significant
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 increase. The cost of mobile
phone
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games
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 and online ones sharply grew,
however
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 they appeared later.
On the contrary
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, console
games
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 marginally became cheaper.
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, the price of console
games
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 was just below 6
billion
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dollars
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 in 2000 while in 2006 it halved. The cost of handheld
games
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 rose gradually from roughly 11
billion
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dollars
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 to just under 18
billion
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dollars
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 in 2006. In 2004 and 2005, the figures are almost equal. Online
games
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 and mobile
phone
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games
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 appeared in 2001 and 2002 respectively.
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, the price of online
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 increased considerably from nearly 1
billion
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dollars
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 to about 9
billion
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dollars
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. The growth
of
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cost
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the cost
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 of mobile
phone
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games
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 was
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 remarkable and in 2006, their price became approximately 7
billion
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dollars
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.
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