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Are music and songs important in English language?

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Look at the picture. Do you know them? Do you know where
this
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 photo was taken? It is the eleventh studio album by the English rock band - Abbey road.
This
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 music group was formed in 1960 in Liverpool. The group consisted of John Lennon (singer), Paul McCartney (bass
guitar
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), George Harrison (lead
guitar
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) and Ringo Star (drums). The word “Beatlemania” is
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 connected with them. These were successful and their famous songs are
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 Let it be, Yellow Submarine or Help. ▪The Beatles were an English rock band formed in Liverpool in 1960. The group consisted of
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 Lennon (singer), Paul McCartney (bass
guitar
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), George Harrison (lead
guitar
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) and Ringo Star (drums). ▪ They were extremely popular and created what was called “Beatlemania“. Their
first
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 song was Love me do. ▪ They were successful and their most famous songs were Help, Yellow Submarine, Yesterday or All you need is love.
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