More and more people are using internet nowadays for their personal things such as shopping and paying bills. Does advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

There is no doubt that these days, the
internet
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important in our
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lives
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, and anything
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to
internet
even if want to register for something we need
internet
. The question is more in more the communities are working
internet
nowadays for their
indiviual
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individual
things
such
as shop and purchasing bills? In
this
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I am going to discuss my opinion. In terms of the positive side, we need the
internet
in
lifetime
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without
internet
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, we can not
working
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. As well as several
of
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societies can work without the
internet
even if the
internet
not
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work
in
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one hour. The main reason given to support
this
claim is that my friend can not live
witout
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without
network
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if the
network
has
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, he can not
comfort
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. To illustrate,
the
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societies can not comfort at all. ,
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,
me
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, and my brother,
we
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can work without
internet
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for half a day,
as a result
, we make
this
matter easy for us even though anyone
ask
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me
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, and my brother how to stay
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a day without the
internet
? the answer
easy
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because make
this
matter easy for us. To sum up,
although
some the communities can stay
witout
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without
network
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,
and
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some societies struggle with
this
situation.
Therefore
, I believe that as well as I can see
this
siutation
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are more complex and I hope
this
is not
happend
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happened
happen
in the future if the
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are
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closed it get a
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bang so I prefer
this
not
happend
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happen
happened
in the future.
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