In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case ? Do you think this a positive or negative situation ?

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contemporary era, whenever people's needs and requirements are increasing due to, the advent of technology .
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, in so.e nations , owing
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facility is the most important factor rather than renting
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for citizen.
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, they have emphasized that it assists them
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their wealthy lifestyle. Some argued that getting their own has a positive and negative
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on them and I will discuss on these two views and eventually, I
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advantage of
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a building , it is able to
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our living standard the community b.
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, in India , people who have been living in a rented
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consider
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a poor residents
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.
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, it attains to acquire
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among other
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beings and they have their own rights to do changes for own
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and particularly, whenever they would be able to share their own property with their children for their better future.
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negative
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effect on our lifestyle, whenever travellers and government job workers who want to protect their carrier , definitely transfer procedure is most important for them.
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, recently, I travelled to France for spending my summer vacation and I got
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house
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for my accommodation In there rather than owning a building and it assisted me to reduce my
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, when we have arrived to acquire own building
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however
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, sometimes it becomes a useless property while we unable maintain in a proper way because
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high expenses. In conclusion, in my perspective, I believe whenever we should want to think
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, are any productive reasons ,and we would have benefits to our life. If we do not have
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vision to plan to
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owing
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accommodation, we will face
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problem
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and
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to
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in our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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