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Traffic congestion is a growing problem in many major cities. Some people say that the government should be responsible to reduce the use of cars. And the car users also have to use public transportation more. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Traffic
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 congestion is a major problem in many countries. Some people believe that the government should implement some laws and take responsibility for solving these issues. Others argue that the population should give more priority to public
transportation
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. In
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 essay, both ideas will be discussed and I will give my own proposal. On the one hand, it cannot be denied that some regulations that the government will implement or measures that it will take to improve public
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 can lead to a reduction in
traffic
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 jams on the
roads
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.
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, charging for cars on some
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, imposing additional taxes, and creating a
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 environment for public
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,
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 as special high-speed trains or bus routes, may be options to discourage people from driving their own vehicles.
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, in Singapore, charging for the
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 of some
roads
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 has resulted in an increase in the number of people using
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transportation
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.
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, users can give priority to public
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 to decries the problem of
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 jams on the
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.
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, if they
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 their personal cars for weekend trips or long-distance travel, they can partially avoid
traffic
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 jams.
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, in Azerbaijan, the increased
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 of high-speed trains
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 the city
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 has reduced
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 congestion in many areas. In conclusion, both the state and citizens have a role to play in solving the
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 jam problem.
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, the state should implement certain policies for
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 and create conditions for the development of public transport. The population should not
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 their cars unless it is absolutely necessary and should include the
use
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 of public transport in their daily activities.

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coherence
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and flows logically from the previous one. This will enhance the overall coherence of your argument.
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Provide a more thorough examination of the counterargument to strengthen your response.
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Clarify and expand on your examples to make them directly relevant to the points being made; this will support your arguments more effectively.
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Your introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion and mentions both viewpoints.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes the key points and presents a balanced viewpoint on the issue.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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