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It is important for the childern to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. puninshment is necesssary to help them learn this distinction. to what extent do youagree or disagree with this opinion? what sort of punishment parents and teachers be allowed to use? Children are

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The diagram illustrates how electricity is produced using a system called Ocean Thermal Energy Conversion(OTEC) Overall, the system's purpose is to convert salty
water
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 into drinkable liquid. The
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 enters the system from two tubes, located on different levels. The work of the OTEC is based on the green energy coming from the sun. In the
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 step, the
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 is provided using the top and down tubes. The former is located on the surface level of the ocean, while the latter is located at about 500 meters in depth. The
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 from the
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 tube is poured into the container which has multiple exits, at the top and the bottom. As the
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 is heated by the sun, it evaporates through the top exit and rotates the turbine which is situated in that pipe. The movement of the turbine creates electricity.
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 the vapour continues motion and goes to the lower container where it is condensed and turned into pure
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. To force the vapour to condense, there is a tube around the
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 tank. The liquid in it is supplied by the
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 exit of the
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 container and the lower pipe coming from the ocean.
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, the waste salt
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 is output.
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