In the past , when students did a university degree they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantah5 and disadvantages of this development

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In ancient times , when
childerns
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children
did
graduation
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degree
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they used to do study in their own nation.
In these
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days they have more scope to study in foreign . There are many positive and negative aspects of
this
development . To commence with , In
this
modern
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scenario
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everything is changed globally as compared to old times. As we say, that
time
once gone
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never comes back in our life.
Firstly
, according to my
perspective
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if we talk about the
education
system in
this
present world, it will take
opposite
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an opposite
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turn in
this
current
time
.
However
, in previous times when students passed their graduation level
then
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at that
time
students easily got
the
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jobs in their own country
as
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and
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commute
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to other nations .
Secondly
, in
this
contemporary area students will go
to
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abroad for higher
education
because over there future is bright and there will be many job
apportunities
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opportunities
for youngsters and
pay
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the pay
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scale is good enough
from
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in
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our
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apply
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on
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own
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country
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the country
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.
In addition
, there is no
discrimation
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discrimination
based on
the
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caste ,
religion
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or religion
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. They pretend everyone to be equal .
For instance
, in
India
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,India
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if we want to give entrance exams for MBBS and for engineering they
first
check the
eligiblity
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eligibility
depend
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depending
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upon the caste system and the main problem is
with
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corruption.
Furthermore
, corruption should be removed from our country so that
childerns
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children
get more opportunities to take
best
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the best
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education
in their own region. To sum up , I concluded that
advantages
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the advantages
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outweight
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outweigh
the disadvantages
education
is
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are
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a powerful weapon which we can use to change our life.
Time
moves in a speedy way ,
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the
time
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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will be taking a huge turnover in
this
ongoing world. people across the globe faced the same difficulty due to modern technology and
with
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apply
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the new techniques that
comes
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in
this
era.
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