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In the past , when students did a university degree they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantah5 and disadvantages of this development

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These days university students have great privileges, they can continue their university studies in a foreign country.
However
, in past days
this
 opportunity was not available for all the admissions. I am going to elucidate the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 development and in the end, I am going to give my own opinions by related examples that I will discuss in relevant paragraphs. To start with,
this
 is clear to anybody that studying in a developed homey has its own advantages. To give an example, when someone has a degree from a developed nation, he/she has more and better job opportunities and a high-quality lifestyle.
Moreover
, individuals who live in
third
 world countries
also
 can abuse
this
 privilege of the world’s development to live in good conditions.
On the other hand
, from a different point of view, some people think
that is
 better for everyone to study and work in their own community. Because in undeveloped, countries governments try to educate students in universities to help the country to develop faster and easier.
Furthermore
, some regions let some intelligent recruitments study abroad with the university scholarship and get back after education to help the country in way of development. To sum up, in my, opinion everyone has the responsibility for their own life.
This
 is better for anyone to study and work in developed countries and abuse
this
 opportunity
that is
 now available to everyone living in
this
 world. In my opinion, the advantages are strongly outweighing the disadvantages
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