Some people say that technologies such as mobile phones are disrupting social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The rising amount of
people
in need raised
people
's concern about the consequences caused by advanced technologies.
Thus
, some
people
claim that mobile
phones
are detrimental to social interaction. As far as I am concerned, I disagree with
this
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a large extent as
phones
can let
people
care more about others.
To begin
with, mobile
phones
may reduce the interest of
people
to communicate with each other in society. As advanced technologies allow
people
to entertain themselves by having a large range of amusements, they may be indulged in online activities and be isolated from the outside world.
For example
, young
people
may play video games all day long
instead
of joining some parties or meeting different
people
.
Therefore
, if fewer and fewer
people
participated in the meeting, others may be influenced and follow their behaviours which will
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the disruption of social interaction.
However
, mobile
phones
can provide more information about
society
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. As it seems more convenient for writers to publish social news online than
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the newspapers, information can be spread faster and wider.
For example
,
people
can see various news from different social media sites.
Therefore
, The public may be more willing to join the voluntary services once they have knowledge about the difficulties happening in the community. In conclusion,
although
mobile
phones
may keep
people
out of the community due to the attractive media sites, advanced technologies can be more beneficial as
people
are being exposed to as
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current news as they want and be helpful to others.
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