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The main cause of global warming is pollution from cars. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#pollution #cars
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In recent years,
the
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air
 pollution has aroused people's attention to environmental protection. Some attribute poor
air
 quality to the overuse of cars. Others believe
air
 pollution comes from other different sources,
such
 as manufacturing and agricultural industry. In my opinion, I believe vehicles are not the major cause of global warming for the following reasons.  Admittedly, the operation of
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the automobile
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automobile
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 will generate greenhouse
gas
, including and not limited to carbon dioxide.
However
, cars produce very limited harmful
gas
 from
its
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 emissions compared to other human activities. In the manufacturing corporation, scientific evidence reveals that the burning of fossil fuels generates tons of harmful
gas
 per day. A large portion of manufacturers tends to ignore the warning from the healthcare departments and are reluctant to adopt clean energy products.
Likewise
, in the agricultural industry, the traditional cultivating approach and unlimited deforestation exacerbate the increase of greenhouse
gas
. With regards to the car
emission
, harmful
gas
 can be reduced thanks to the development of car
emission
 filter technology, which can significantly reduce the output of carbon dioxide and guarantee its
emission
 is cleaner. Governments have made installing
emission
 filters compulsory in a number of countries. Along with the development of
the
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electrical automobiles, drivers are doing their parts to protect the Earth and make sure our environment becomes more sustainable. In conclusion, the main source of
air
 pollution comes from the manufacturing and agricultural industry. Eco-friendly
automobile
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 pose no threat to our environment.
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