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Advertising has grown enormously over the past years and some are of the opinion that commercials we encounter everywhere are impacting our lives in an unfavourable way. I partially disagree with
this
argument and I will explain my view in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the majority of adverts that we see on television or social media are related to a product
that is
actually unnecessary for our daily lives. But with the certain techniques and sales strategies that they use, they
consequently
manipulate us and make us waste our money.
Moreover
, some adverts may
over exaggerate
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the item and once people purchase it they realize that it is not as good as they polish it.
As a result
of these fraudulent behaviours, an individual may feel disappointed and fooled, too.
On the other hand
, commercials can be handy for customers. One example to fortify
this
view is that with the help of advertisements, people can be aware of different options and prices related to the same product.
Thus
, they may be able to choose the cheapest option and save a great deal of money.
In addition
to that, people who buy the item can write their comments right below the advert that we see on social media.
Hence
,
this
gives us the opportunity to check the reviews and make our final decision on whether to purchase it or not. In conclusion, even though commercials may sometimes be a money trap and entice us to buy things we don't need, I believe they are highly beneficial since they provide us with the chance to compare different brands and read actual users' opinions about the product.
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Task Response
Expand on the negative impact of commercials on personal lives and society to provide a more comprehensive view.
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