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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to become successful career. While others believe that it is better to get a job staight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, there is a growing number of
students
 choosing to go to university on their way to success. Some
people
 believe getting job experience is more important while others believe tertiary
education
 is necessary. In my opinion, I believe university
education
 is an indispensable part
to
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 one's achievement for the following reasons. Admittedly, job experience
are
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 preferred by employers when it comes to job interviews.
However
, higher
education
 background enables candidates to stand out from other competitors since university-educated
students
 tend to be more knowledgeable.
Education
 broadens
people
's horizons and exposes them to a sea of information.
For instance
, studies reveal that Chinese university
students
 have above average language skills and theoretical scientific knowledge.ย Researchers linked
this
 result to
students
' increased contact with foreign literature and documentaries. Aside from that, well-educated
people
, including
people
 with master's and doctorate degrees not only have concrete professional knowledge
,
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 but are
also
 able to analyse problems more systematically thanks to the rigorous training received at schools. The demanding academic projects often require
students
 to challenge their common sense
thus
 helping them develop a critical mind. In conclusion, it is safe to say that
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialized knowledge
  • professional fields
  • networking opportunities
  • career path
  • practical experience
  • financial pressures
  • economic independence
  • early work experience
  • apprenticeships
  • vocational training
  • hands-on skills
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