Some people believe that the government should help the unemployed or just laid off from work on a weekly basis. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion

The state has been providing financial aid to the jobless and those who have been let go from their various
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work places
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for quite some time.
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, recently
this
has caused major debate among the general population with some fully supporting the idea and others
veiwing
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viewing
it as a waste of time. I personally think that the government should continue helping the vulnerable so that they can still be able to afford rent,
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care. Homelessness is one of the major problems arising from unemployment.
Alot
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of families are finding themselves having to live in their cars or worse off on the streets because they don't have money to pay for housing.
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increase in crime, and street vending Wich
further
leads to
a dirty and unorganized cities
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a dirty and unorganized city
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. Approximately 20
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of the population live
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flats. Health insurance is one of the
thr
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the
three
most important things a person should have,
however
it has become very expensive that the common man cannot afford it.
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healthcare has saved
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a lot
of lives by providing free medical reviews, medicine and
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surgeries. A study recently conducted at the oxford university
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showed that half the diabetic population depends on
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state funds in order to get their daily dose of insulin. In conclusion, the government should continue to help the
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community by providing them with homes and health care.
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