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Some developed countries have reduced the number of school hours. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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It is irrefutable that the amount of
time
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 spend in
school
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 plays an imperative role in
pupis'
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pupils
pupil
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.
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, the
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 of
school
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hours
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 have been lessened by wealthy nations in
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 contemporary era. Some people ponder that it is positive development while others oppose
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this
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 notion. But
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 am in favour
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 decreasing
school
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hours
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. To commence with, by depleting
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 of
school
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students
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 can participate in extracurricular
activities
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. To elaborate
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, having a quality of
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 they are more likely to prefer in take part
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in physical
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activities
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 which
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 paramount importance not only for their mental health but
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 for their physical health. Apart from
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, the burden of study would be lessened
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 their shoulders and they will remain fit and healthy and
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 learn name and fame through these
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 by showing their inner talent on account of having
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the appropriate
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 amount of
time
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 .
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, the headline of "The Moscow
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" newspaper revealed that those
students
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 who have to spend limited
time
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 in
school
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 have good
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scores
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 in academics than those who spend
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quality
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time
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in
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 education providers.
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, little
hours
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 which are fixed in developed countries can increase the level of critical thinking.
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, if
students
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 have sufficient
time
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 after
school
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time
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then
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 they can make strong bonding with their family members. To
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explain
, they can not only share their inns and outs of them bit
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 gain knowledge of all walks of
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 from their parent's own
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experiences
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.
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, owing to reduce
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hours
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, pupils feel more energetic and
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 and they may not get bored
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 completing their
school
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 tasks.
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, numerous studies have
showed
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 that in which schools are taught to
students
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 for
less
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hours
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 and they are
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more
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 productive and maintain a fine balance between
school
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 and home
life
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.
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, pupils grasp information in their spare
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 thereby broadening their horizons. In conclusion, by plummeting
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hours
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 in
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the developed
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 world children not only indulge in various types of
activities
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 but
also
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 upgrade
standard
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 of their
life
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 by polishing themselves due to
availability
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the availability
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 of free
time
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • balanced lifestyle
  • stress and burnout
  • self-directed learning
  • conventional curriculum
  • family bonds
  • academic rigor
  • gaps in knowledge
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • extracurricular activities
  • supplement
  • personalized and adaptive learning
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