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Nowadays many students choose to take a year off before going to university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of taking a year off, and give your own opinion about whether it is a good idea.

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It is true that more and more
students
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 nowadays decide to take a
gap
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year
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 before entering
university
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. While there are some drawbacks to making
this
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 choice, it still benefits
gap
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year
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 takers a lot in my opinion. On the one hand, some people may argue that there are disadvantages for teenagers who do not go to college directly after graduating from high school. The main drawback is that
students
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 might have trouble catching up with other classmates after a
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year
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rest
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of rest
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, and eventually lose interest in learning for
higher
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 degree.
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, a Student without
an
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university
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 diploma would have trouble entering
in
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the
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an
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 international company
,
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 and becomes less competitive. The other weakness would be wasting time if
students
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 keep fooling around and have no idea what they are going to do in
the
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 future career. Those would cause serious impacts
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 their lives, by losing a chance to have a brighter career path and
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 with other elites.
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, there are many advantages
for
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students
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 taking a
year
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 off before enrolling in college.
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, it is a good time for
students
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 to rest after finishing the
university
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 entrance exam, they can either travel to other countries or visit some famous places within a
year
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.
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, they may have more opportunities to learn what they are interested in by taking some short-term courses or becoming an apprentice in a company.
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, a student may find himself
prefer
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 drawing rather than studying during the
gap
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year
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,
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 and have more time to cultivate his interest.
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, those people may have more
chance
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 to learn some practical skills. In conclusion,
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 there are both pros and cons
in
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 taking a
year
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 off before
university
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 enrollment, I believe that it is rewarded when using that
gap
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year
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exploring
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to explore
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 life and
finding
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 out what matters more in one’s future.
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