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Nowadays more and more young people hold the important positions in the government. Some people think that it is a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays more and more young
people
 hold important
positions
 in the government. Some
people
 think
that is
 a good thing while others argue that it is not suitable. Discuss both views and give your
opinion
. Over the past decades, the affairs of running a
nation
was
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 considered a thing for the older age, today the trend is that
increasing
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 number of young adults are assuming governmental
positions
. While most individuals believe it ought not to be, many others are of the
opinion
 that
this
 is a welcomed practice. In my
opinion
, leadership is better in the hands of a young. On the one
hand
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 some
people
 believe that the younger generation
rule
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rules
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 a
nation
 better and I agree.
This
 is because they are vibrant and energetic. These
group
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groups
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 of
people
 are full of energy they have what it takes to see to it that rules and regulations are kept by the citizens because they have the energy to move around the community and different times, making sure that things are being done properly.
Furthermore
, these adults are full of ideas and are compliant with the
fast moving
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 trend of technology.
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example
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 they are called the computer generation and apar with the newest computer technologies which are necessary for a
nation
's growth.
On the other
hand
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 it is often thought that leadership
positions
 are not to be occupied by the youngsters. Leadership roles require experience and
this
 is one important quality most of them do not possess as experience comes with increased age.
For
instance
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 a
nation
 which is ruled by
much
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 older group usually
toll
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 the part of dialogue over war. Another reason why young adults may not be a better choice is that they make hasty decisions which they begin to regret after a while because most of them are zealous they tend to jump
into
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 immediate conclusions on matters and
this
 may endanger the life of their citizens. In conclusion, while
people
 may vary in their
opinion
, I think that young stars are a better chance to succeed in holding crucial
positions
 in the government.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innovative solutions
  • Modern policies
  • Adequately represented
  • Viewpoints and issues
  • High energy levels
  • Adaptability
  • Complex political landscape
  • Impulsive decisions
  • Undue influence
  • Susceptible to pressure
  • Seasoned colleagues
  • Lobbyists
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