Some people believe that the experiences children have before they go to school will have the greatest effect on their future life's others argue that experiences gained when they are teenagers have a bigger influence. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is considered that the experience that a
child
goes through before pre-school has a great influence on the
future
life
of a
child
. Based on
this
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experiences
it has both psychological and physiological
effect
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effects
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on the
child
. There are a lot of factors that
influences
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influence
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the educational ability of a
child
, through the childhood upbringing and activities carried out during
this
space of
year's
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years
year
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. Speaking
on
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about
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teenage
life
experiences
was said to have
also
a greater influence on the
future
expectations of the teen. The
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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and experience that a teenager finds
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himself
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him self
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himself
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affects the
future
, it actually makes or destroys the
future
. Knowing that the
future
is birthed by the school
year's
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in
this
current generation and
this
educational
centry
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century
centre
.
To begin
with
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one is called a
child
from 6
years
to 13
years
of
age
. The
future
of a
child
goes down to his early or childhood upbringing, family relationships, (for illustration having parents that are separated),
family
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and family
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activities. A
child
that knows how to read and write at the
age
of 9years to 10
years
shows he had
an
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early teaching and practice. Having abilities like critical
thinkng
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thinking
increases intellectual level. They are
experiences
that affect the physiology of a
child
such
as
adults
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adult
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molestation,
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and parents
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parents
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parents'
parent's
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separation. lack of family care,
negelation
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regulation
negation
of
child
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the child
a child
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needs like, food, water, love and protection and encouragement,
this
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apply
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are
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physical activities that can influence the
future
of a
child
.
Furthermore
from the other stand of the table, teenagers
is
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said to have more
experiences
that may affect
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their
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they
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the
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future
life
.
This
experience can boil down to peer pressure, low
self esteem
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self-esteem
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, adult molestation,
exposure
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and exposure
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to pornography that
affect
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affects
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the dopamine in the brain marking the individual less active in his or her educational activity. A teen is one from the
age
of 13years to 18
year's
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years
year
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of
age
.
This
also
affects the
individuals
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individual's
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ability to understand,
coordinate
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and coordinate
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intellectual information, it reduces the IQ level, it was noted that
the
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they
is
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are
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formation
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the formation
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of black patches on the dopamine in the brain.
This
also
affects critical thinking etc.
This
study was carried out at the university of Barnes
in
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(2013) by a research student from a medical report of Doctor Ben lens.
This
is said to have played a great deal in the
future
life
of
the
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teens. In
conclusion
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based on my opinion
thur
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that
the
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that
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teens have greater factors that
influences
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influence
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their
future
life
during
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their
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they
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the
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days of educational training,
i
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will
pin point
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pinpoint
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that the
experiences
of a
child
before starting school can affect the
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child's
childs
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child's
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future
life
the more.

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