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In many situations, people who break the law should be warned instead of punished. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Some would argue that law-breakers ought to be warned rather than punished. I personally believe that strict sanction still has benefits for society at large, the reason for my opinion will be elaborated in
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 with, it might seem reasonable for some individuals to believe that some criminals who commit negligible crimes should be warned
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 because everybody deserves a
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 chance. Some offenders might offence the rule as they do not consider it thoroughly regarding the consequence of their action.
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, countless younger that commit some minor guilts
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 as stealing or punching their friends, should have done those actions because of without any villainous intention.
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,
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 is the reason why some people want to give them a chance.
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, it is undeniable that the effective solution to solving
crime
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 problems is deterrence. I strongly believe that who have made either minor offences or serious crimes should be justified and receive punishment by law.
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, the
crime
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 rate will increase if perpetrators knew that they will just
warned
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 without severe sanctions, they would do more guilts in future.
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, an adequate penalty,
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 only the best way to give lessons to offenders, but
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 give justice to their victims as well.
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, it is a better way to minimize
crime
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 in society. To summarize,
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, non-serious criminals should be warned in order to probably turn to the right patch, appropriate sanctions for those who commit crimes
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 have a crucial role for society in reducing the
crime
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 rate and confirming safety for citizens as well.
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