Some people believe that education trip or excursion helps promote overall holistic learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

According to a majority of ,people it is known that
excursions
within the scope of academics help to improve the ability of the
students
to learn in the
area
of
study
. Excursion I agree to be one of the most powerful ways by which
students
do well in school and
also
it promote easy learning, teamwork. It
also
has other advantages sure as improving understanding of a particular subject or topic, it
also
makes
students
be vast on not limited to what is written in the test books or what was thought in the classroom or the lecture hall.
In addition
excursions
and academic trip improves the ability of scholars to learn and improves the understanding of the topics that were thought in school.
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in 2015 research was carried out at Barnes university on history
students
to compare the learning ability of
students
that go on educational
excursions
and does that
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in the classroom only. The result shows that the scholars that engage in
excursions
have a higher understanding of subjects and topics within the
area
of
study
. ,
Furthermore
excursion
also
helps to promote enlightenment to many
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of academic
study
. It makes
students
not to be limited in
the
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academic experience thereby making them vast in
the
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area
of
study
.
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when a nursing student in training is being posted to more than one hospital unit for practicals,
this
makes them more vast and to know many aspects of nursing practice. Here by making them vast. It was
also
proven that those
students
in history class who engaged in
excursions
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by
they
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lecture learnt other aspects that were not thought in their classroom. In ,
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I totally argue that exposing
students
and scholars to
excursions
and academic trips makes the
students
be
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more vast and
also
improves understanding of the
area
of
study
.

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