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Some people believe that education trip or excursion helps promote overall holistic learning. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

According to a majority of ,people it is known that
excursions
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 within the scope of academics help to improve the ability of the
students
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 to learn in the
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 of
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. Excursion I agree to be one of the most powerful ways by which
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 do well in school and
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 it promote easy learning, teamwork. It
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 has other advantages sure as improving understanding of a particular subject or topic, it
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 makes
students
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 be vast on not limited to what is written in the test books or what was thought in the classroom or the lecture hall.
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excursions
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 and academic trip improves the ability of scholars to learn and improves the understanding of the topics that were thought in school.
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 in 2015 research was carried out at Barnes university on history
students
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 to compare the learning ability of
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 that go on educational
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 and does that
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 in the classroom only. The result shows that the scholars that engage in
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 have a higher understanding of subjects and topics within the
area
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 of
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. ,
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 excursion
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 helps to promote enlightenment to many
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 of academic
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. It makes
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 not to be limited in
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 academic experience thereby making them vast in
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area
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 of
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 when a nursing student in training is being posted to more than one hospital unit for practicals,
this
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 makes them more vast and to know many aspects of nursing practice. Here by making them vast. It was
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 proven that those
students
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 in history class who engaged in
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 as
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 lecture learnt other aspects that were not thought in their classroom. In ,
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 I totally argue that exposing
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 and scholars to
excursions
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 and academic trips makes the
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be
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more vast and
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 improves understanding of the
area
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 of
study
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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