Question: Many government thinks that economic progress is their most important goals, some people however thinks that other progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both view and give your opinion

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of political unit leaders have more interest in financial growth,
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where as
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whereas
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some
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belief
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that
education
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and
health
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services
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plays
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an important role in a
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of paramount significance in a geographical region. Let's begin with financial growth,a
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with limited finance suffers greatly but with sufficient money, poverty is reduced
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is because everyone finds it easier to maintain
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of living and
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afford their basic needs.Take
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western
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the western
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world average
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individuals
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have a comfortable home and can afford three square
meal
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result
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poverty is on the low side.
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, employment is assured
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financial growth,
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nation
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the nation
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able to build more industries thereby eliminating
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number of unemployed
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tax revenue is increased due to
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in
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the output
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of industries and other public
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, other areas
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as public
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,
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and
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should not be neglected in a geographical region.Good
health
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promotes
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a standard
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of living, increases life expectancy and
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out put
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at
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the work
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work place
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which in turn increases tax revenue.
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in
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the other hand
,
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is of paramount significance as it
enable
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individuals
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to have
greater
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understanding of civic rules and political issues and as well
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an increase
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increase
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in
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of literate in a
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. To sum it up,
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it is a common thought that financial progress is very necessary, political leaders should as well consider other sectors
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as
health
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and
education
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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