Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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advent of technology, had pushed
people
to adapt
the
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fast pace life by offering too many choices in terms of lifestyle,
transport
,
food
, etc. I lean towards the agreement of a given statement by
emphasing
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emphasizing
on possible points with relatable examples.
To begin
with,
earlier
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lives of the
people
was
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depended upon a stock they had acquired from their harvest which used to be produced two times a year. But nowadays,
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as
primary
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a primary
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source,
people
have no time to cook
food
after tiring work hours.
Instead
, they prefer to purchase the packed
food
that can be prepared within a
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few minutes
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minutes
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in
microwave
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the microwave
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or ends up with footfall
to
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in
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restaurant
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the restaurant
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.
For instance
,
The
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frozen peas
is
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available everywhere which was used to appear in season once a year.
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, packed dry peas
is
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also
an option in any supermart at
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reasonable
resonable
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a resonable
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price.
In addition
, Mangoes which arrive in the summer season
,
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can be consumed
any
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at any
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time in the form of
tetrapack
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tetra pack
juice.
On the other hand
, Today's
transport
facility is ubiquitous in every
ways
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that
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include
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road, air, loco, and water medium as compared to earlier times which were limited to
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animal-pulled
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carts in order to access the public
transport
facilities that were present in distinct places from rural areas.
for example
, The capital of India, Delhi city has various options for
transport
. nearly a decade ago there was only public bus
transport
to reach the particular destination. now due to
increase
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in development, It has
Metro-Rail
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a Metro-Rail
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network for
rapid
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the rapid
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movement of
people
.
In addition
, most
of
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people
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the people
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prefer their
owned
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vehicle to access the airport for foreign travel. In conclusion, there are many choices.
Hence
, in
future
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,future
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there will even more choices in
variety
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a variety
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of things that
people
want which will eventually make their life easier.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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