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Band 5.5

Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities

#people #work #hours #time #leisure #activities
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At the present
time
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, the
sociaty
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society
 has enough information to understand that the
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in
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life
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 is achieved by a balanced
life
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.
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mean
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 that it does not
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matter
 how
recognize
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 you are at
work
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 if your personal
life
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 is
a
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messy
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. Some advantages could be
releated
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related
released
 of having a long shift
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,
however
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, the drawbacks of working long
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 will make people waste
leisure
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activities
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 which is
essencial
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essential
 for humans. On one hand, is it
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to
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work
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 hard and
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accumulate
 long
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 shift
.
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 In some cases working as much as you can
might
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brings
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 promotion,
money saving
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 or even facilitate to
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 skills that are required in a job profile. Notably,
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 behaviour should be essential during an
especific
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specific
 professional
time
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 in order to achieve goals.
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, in some
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circumstances
 working long need to be a fair effort.
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,
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 all the energy
in
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 one specif area of your
life
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 might be overwhelming. Considering that the day has 24
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, the amount of
time
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that is
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 healthy to be
on
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at
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work
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 is eight
hours
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.
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, the
others
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activities
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 should be related
with
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to
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 rest end
leisure
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 moments. The specialists
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 that if every
bussiness
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business
 person
have
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has
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 more spare
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 to deserve, the efficiency at
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it
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will be twice better.
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, more creative
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ideas
 are
comming
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coming
 and emotions related
with
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 stress would decrease.
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, it is knowing that
life
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 needs balance. To summarize, in some
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specific
moment
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 in our lives, working long
hours
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 may be required, but
make
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making
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work
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 more essential than rest should be waste of
time
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. In my opinion, leaving little
time
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 for
leisure
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activities
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 has more disadvantages than advantages. To deserve a balance in
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, people need either
work
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 or rest and,
fortunetely
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fortunately
unfortunately
, we are experiencing good examples of
leisure
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activities
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 nowadays.
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