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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience

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Nowadays, the
internet
 has extremely changed our
lives
 over the past few decades. Others believe that the total effect of
this
 technology has been beneficial while some
considers
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 these changes have been negative. I surmise that using
internet
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 has many advantages to our
lives
.
This
 essay will discuss the positive changes to our
lives
 with the use of the
internet
.
Firstly
,
internet
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 makes our
lives
 easy and convenient. In my experience,
the
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 online messaging application like Messenger helps me to communicate with my family and friends who are miles away from me.
This
 technology has a great impact
to
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 the
lives
 of families especially those who are working away from home.
Secondly
, it helps the business person to advertise their products to increase their profit.
For example
, they can post
in
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 the website the menu they cooked for the day and receive orders from the clients through the online selling application. Contrariwise,
used
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 of
internet
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 can get you scammed because of the items posted online.
Finally
, the technology has helped the health workers working in the hospitals to get
the
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accurate information from the
internet
 like Google. Like when there is a
new
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 prescribed medication to patients, nurses can surf the net to know the potential side effects and nursing implications before giving the medicine
for
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 patients
thus
, advocating
patient
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 safety. In summary,
although
 there are drawbacks to the use of
internet
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, I am of the view that there are more benefits to people. It makes their
lives
 easy and convenient.
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