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Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#topic #people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
The common
people
 are always keen to know about the personal
life
 of
celebrities
. The
media
 gives coverage to popular stars
as
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an
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when they
apprear
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appear
 in public.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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private
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the private
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life
 of well know
people
 and
difficulties
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the difficulties
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 being faced due to stardom. The
celebrities
 are being considered
as
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an
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ideal and motivating
personality
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personalities
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 by millions.
People
 become crazy for a glimpse of their favourite
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sportsman
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sports man
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sportsman
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 or movie personality and
hence
 maintaining
secracy
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secrecy
security
 of their private
life
 is very important. All human
being
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beings
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 wish to live
free
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a free
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life
 without any
inconvinience
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inconvenience
;
however
,
a
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the
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media
 always try to capture all movements of
celebrities
 and air
it
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them
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. Several times, TV channels
shows
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vaction
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vacation
 trips of famous
people
 without their prior permission. The
media
 plays a huge role in society. The
media
 creates paid news for
marketting
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marketing
 and to increase publicity of their channels by any means.
People
 should respect for private
life
 of famous
people
 and
do
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not interfere in
any one's
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life
.
Moreover
,
celebrities
 themselves should not create hype to stay in limelight and maintain normalcy. The understanding and cooperation of
media
 and common
people
 would provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 and sustainable atmosphere
to
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 everyone to live a good
life
. There is always
price
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a price
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 one has to pay for their achievement and
that is
 quite higher in
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the case
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 of famous personalities. to
payof
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pay of
 In my view, famous
people
 shall be treated with great respect and their private
life
 shall be equally
respeted
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respected
 by
media
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the media
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 to create good harmonies.
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