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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
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The common
people
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 are always keen to know about the personal
life
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 of
celebrities
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. The
media
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 gives coverage to popular stars
as
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an
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when they
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appear
 in public.
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about
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private
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the private
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life
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 of well know
people
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 and
difficulties
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the difficulties
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 being faced due to stardom. The
celebrities
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 are being considered
as
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an
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ideal and motivating
personality
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personalities
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 by millions.
People
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 become crazy for a glimpse of their favourite
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sportsman
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sports man
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sportsman
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 or movie personality and
hence
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 maintaining
secracy
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secrecy
security
 of their private
life
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 is very important. All human
being
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beings
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 wish to live
free
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a free
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life
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 without any
inconvinience
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inconvenience
;
however
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,
a
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media
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 always try to capture all movements of
celebrities
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 and air
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them
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. Several times, TV channels
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vaction
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vacation
 trips of famous
people
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 without their prior permission. The
media
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 plays a huge role in society. The
media
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 creates paid news for
marketting
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marketing
 and to increase publicity of their channels by any means.
People
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 should respect for private
life
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 of famous
people
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 and
do
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not interfere in
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anyone's
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life
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.
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,
celebrities
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 themselves should not create hype to stay in limelight and maintain normalcy. The understanding and cooperation of
media
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 and common
people
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 would provide
healthy
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a healthy
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 and sustainable atmosphere
to
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for
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 everyone to live a good
life
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. There is always
price
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a price
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 one has to pay for their achievement and
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 quite higher in
case
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the case
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 of famous personalities. to
payof
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pay of
 In my view, famous
people
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 shall be treated with great respect and their private
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 shall be equally
respeted
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respected
 by
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media
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the media
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 to create good harmonies.
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