Employees sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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While some people say that personal information,
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as hobbies and marital status is required for applying for jobs, others disagree and believe that
employees
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should only consider work-related experiences. Both sides of
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statement will be discussed, and my opinion will be given. One clear benefit of asking about
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' personal details is
employees
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can get to know more about the person.
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, hobbies and interests can show the personality of
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whether they are an introvert who enjoys reading alone on their couch in their free time or an extrovert who likes to go party every night.
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, marital status can
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roughly indicate how much time they need to spend on their personal matters,
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as do they need to leave at 5pm for picking up their children from school.
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, many people believe that personal information is irrelevant and can lead to bias.
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should look for people who have the ability to perform the job well and make a decision based on only their work-related experiences and skills. Regardless of who
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are or what their interests are, they should still have an opportunity for a job if they have enough skills and be able to manage their personal and work lives well. In conclusion, I believe that during the recruiting process,
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should focus more on the technical and soft skills required for the job.
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, hobbies and other personal information
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help
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to understand more about
candidates
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' personalities.
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