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Your friend has been offered a place on course at the university where you studied. He/she would like your advise about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email -Describe where you lived when you were a student at the university -Recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation -Warm him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation write at least 150 words.

#friend #place #course #university #email #-describe #student #-recommend #accommodation #-warm #mistakes #students
Dear Andrea, Congratulations
for
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 making it to the '
University
 of Maryland', I am so proud and happy for you! The 'construction management' course at the
university
 is highly reputed. I am
surely
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 you'll be doing wonders after you graduate. I remember you mentioning
about
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apply
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university
accommodation
 in your voicemail. There are plenty of on-campus and off-campus options available for
accommodation
. When I was attending the
university
, I stayed in
an
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off-campus
accommodation
, since it was cheaper than the on-campus one. I stayed in a nice
cozy
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 apartment located at '1575 Tremont Street', it is just 2 blocks away from the student centre, near the subway line. I will share
contact
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 details of my landlord and you can find out if the place is still available. I would
also
 suggest looking for
accommodation
 vacancies on the
university
's online student portal
,
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 since many students post their requirements for a roommate or available vacant spot in an apartment online.
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 is indeed
is
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the best way to get to know people,
places
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 and to check out
university
 accommodations. While looking for
accommodation
, be wary of scamsters around you. Some people disguise themselves as landlords or roommates on the
university
's student portal and try to extract your contact or financial information and use it for other their own means. Many students make
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 mistake of trusting random people online. So please be very careful. I am so excited for you and can't wait to meet you at the
university
! I am flying down there
next
 month. Your Friend, Jay
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