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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

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There are a lot of pupils who choose to study abroad rather than in their country. Learning at colleges and universities in a foreign country has numerous advantages in terms of a new study
environment
 and friends.
Besides
 that, students need to stay away from their
family
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families
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 and even get
culture-shock
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culture shock
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 when they
first
 face a new culture. The distinction between cultures of two countries may get students
culture-shock
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. Learning from a
long distance
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 forces them to stay away from their family. That could lead to bad
emotion
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emotions
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 and depression due to the sudden changes in daily habits and lifestyle.
As a result
, students’ scores and study
behavior
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 will go down dramatically because they closely depend on their feelings and mood.
Nevertheless
, pupils can absorb a lot of benefits from learning in a new
environment
. There is no doubt that the learning
environment
 and routines have a direct impact on how you develop your skills. Staying in one place and learning in the same
environment
 won’t make you better. Apart from that, learning abroad can provide students
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whole new
environment
 with
modern
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 curriculum and teaching techniques.
Consequently
, not only your knowledge will be wider but
also
 your experience will be better.
Furthermore
, meeting and interacting with new friends,
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 more relationships will
also
 contribute to
construct
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 your characteristics, knowledge and experience. In conclusion, the advantages of learning in a foreign country
are dominate
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 the drawbacks. Studying abroad is a great idea for those who want to challenge themselves in a new
environment
 in order to be mature.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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