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The best way to resolve the international environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extend, do you agree or disagree?

#cost #fuel
Currently, with the escalating perils of environmental issues, a lot of experts in
this
 field are joining together to find out more effective solutions to reduce the population. While raising the
price
 of petrol is a common method applied in many countries with the hope to reduce the air emission, I only partially agree with
this
 policy because along with some positive results it could bring to the environment, it may lead to unforeseen adverse effects ,especially on the economy. On the one hand, it is undeniable that the higher costs of fuel can help the government reduce the emission of greenhouse gas into the atmosphere, the main contributor to global warming.
First
, the high
price
 of fuels may limit the demand for buying private vehicles because beyond the amount of money to pay for the
car
, the buyer must
also
 consider whether they can afford the level of patrol its engine required to operate every day. In terms of residents who already have their own private vehicles, they may decide to use their
car
 less and alternatively communicate by public transport
such
 as buses or trams which give them more financial benefits. In
this
 way, the number of traffic jams will be minimized,
thus
 avoiding the greenhouse gas emissions into the air especially when the drivers turn on the
car
 engine but can not move forward.
On the other hand
,
this
 solution may lead to some disadvantages. When the government impose higher taxes on petrol, they accidentally limit the development of the transport and tourism industry. The higher
price
 of fossil fuels may cause the soar in travelling fares including the
price
 of flight tickets and rental
car
 services.
That is
 the reason fewer residents decide to travel around.
Moreover
, shipping companies due to expensive fuels can proactively cut off their supply routes.
Consequently
, goods may be stagnant and residents may
also
 have to tackle the shortage of necessary products if
this
 issue continually occurs in long term. In conclusion, from my perspective
although
 rising the cost of fuel could be a welcome measure, the authorities should consider all the aspects of
this
 method before putting it into practice to ensure its advantages to the environment as well as narrow negative effects on the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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