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People in the modern world have a greater number of health problems compared to people in the past due to the fact that they have an unhealthy eating habit. Do you agree with the statement?

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Nowadays, It is often thought that modern
people
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 have more
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 problems than
people
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 in the past caused by unhealthy nutrition. In my opinion, I do not agree with the statement.
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, modern
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 have much consent and take care of their
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 by visiting regularly the doctor and making a full body
check-up
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. Having
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 care insurance more than ever. There are
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 many
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 programmes on our smartphones to remind us of our hard pulsation, breathing and having a healthy lifestyle. Even when we do not have much time to do a medical visit, we can do it online with a doctor.
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 in the past doesn't have
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 a facility and the moderation in their life as now. On the one hand, there are lots of fast food and unhealthy eating habit. but
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, the modern generations are more and more interesting in sports and fitness, which is virtually at home or in clubs. We are moving
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 much more to vegan and healthy food styles.
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 become a trend among
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. In the modern generation, there is competition between
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 to stay healthy, and beautiful and have a great appearance. In short,
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 in the past do not have the ability and the facility to go and visit doctors like modern
people
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. All disease
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 have their own medication and remedy. A healthy food style become a trend and
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 now are much more interesting in their appearance and the way they look.
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