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People aim to achieve balance between work and other activities of their lives,but few are able to do this. Suggest problems in balancing and some solution for over- coming such problems.

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A lot of individuals intend to have an equilibrium between
work
 and other recreational activities in their lives but a little proportion of people are able to do
this
.
However
, one of the difficulties associated with
this
, is the inability of humans to prioritize their activities and the solution is to make a list
for
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of
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things
 to be done on a daily basis.
To begin
, a lot of
persons
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 find it demanding to balance their job and family life, reason been that engage themselves in
job
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a job
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 that is too tasking, and they have little or no
time
 for their children, couples need to wake up early to their
placees
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places
 of
work
 so as to meet with the family basic needs .To illustrate, couples who are both bankers and need to get to
work
 on
time
 will live some
work
 undone at home making the home
unkept
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 and unsafe for their kids.
Thus
, having a hard career will have
effect
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 on the family.
Nonetheless
, there are remedies to tackle
this
 issue which are having a list of every
work
 to be done each day and perhaps setting an alarm for each task and a
time
 allocated to each
things
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.
In addition
, engaging in a job that will be less demanding will help to create
time
 for family
time
 out .
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example
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 an article published in Nigeria 2021,revealed that women who write down
things
 they need to do
,
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 can settle between their career and
work
. To conclude,
although
 individuals find it
stressing
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stressful
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 to balance their career with other
things
 ,I believe making a list and getting
a
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less
duty
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 will help them make a balance.

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